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End of Year Reshoot

With all the thinks that went wrong in our first major production, we have learnt what to do, and what to not do for the next production we’re going to have. Firstly, casting is going to start very early, a few months earlier to be specific. This will give us a chance to not only look for more people, but it will also give us time to audition them properly instead of hiring them straight away because we’re short on time. We will still be asking them to send us self tape of themselves, and we’re give them a draft script that we feature the character they’ll be auditioning for in a situation where they have to make a serious life choice. We’re be studying their mannerisms, pace of dialogue, tone and body-language to see if they are better suited for the role. The next thing will be making a draft script, this idea came about so that we stop sending our work/script to people that are not going to end up being casted for our production. Though our script is copy-written, we don’t want to take the chance of it being plagiarised. As I stated on a previous post, we also intent to give the actors a £30 allowance that will cover food, and travel expenses while they are working with us, this will work will for our budget cost and save us a bit of money. We also aim to start using crowdfunding, the module we had in the Foundation Degree will finally come in handy.

In the process of pre-production, we want to  develop all of our character, we have also entertained the idea of one of our feature character becoming a main character. Melody, who was a feature character, is now possibly going to be a main character, the reason for this is that there are many sides to women as a whole, one woman cannot embody every aspect of what being a woman is, there are glamour girls, there are tom-boys, there are woman who are feminists, there are those who don’t agree with feminism, thats just a short example. So making Melody a main character will help us reach more of our female audiences. Those who don’t relate to Tori, might relate to Melody and her free spirit.


I’ve thrown the idea of possibly hiring a researcher to help with out plot development and character development. We as a team will be doing our own research into being better writers, producers and directors! We aim to utilise our Masterclass subscription and take different online courses in writing so we can all come with a different outlook and angle into writing and building the show up. The main reason for us hiring a researcher would be for developing the psyche of each character. The research would be asked to look into different psychological approaches that people have in life, how people come to make life altering good/bad choices, what makes someone calm and collected, what makes someone promiscuous, two faced and so on. having these facts in detail will help us in how we approach and deal with what each character is going through on each episode.


We currently have no date for the reshoot, only the month we intend to shoot it on, which is October. At first I thought this would be a problem due to not being able to borrow university equipment, but after speaking to my tutor he found a way around that problem, and I’m more at ease.


In the aim of having better results, I will be pushing for us to hire a professional sound recorder, cinematographer and someone to keep track of time. We all have learnt how important time management is from this production, and we all intend to make sure we don’t have the same issue.

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Closer – Reflection

The deadline date is closer and closer. I have a few more things to complete and a few dots and lines to fill in before I am happy with what I’m going to hand in. The proposal have changed back and forth based on what the university requires and what the industry standard is. I was confused because I was meeting the requirements for one and at the same time not meeting the requirements for the other. I concluded that this is a university project, and my aim is to get the best grade I can. This also goes for the Treatment. The character bible is also being filled in and a few things that make the character more well rounded, and in sync. Grammar is a big thing for us that keep in letting us down. I’m now always proof reading and getting someone else who isn’t associated with this project to proof read it. The last thing we need to work on is a storyboard and my evaluation. On an individual level, I have been working on the second episode script alone and a few weeks now, the format and structure of how to write and script has been a challenge. A bigger challenge has been writing interesting dialogue. The research I have been doing has really helped a lot. The feedback from the script we have for episode 1 has also been a huge help in letting us know that we’re on the right path on learning how to write a script properly.

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Kill Bill

In my attempt to get the more knowledge in how to better format my episode 2 script, I have had a look at the script that Quentin Tarantino wrote for Kill Bill, this gave me a better understanding of how to my script structure. A few differences I’m seeing that aren’t in my script are; every time a characters dialogue is broken up by a action that occurs on scene Quentin Tarantino continues that character dialogue by writing the characters name above their dialogue. Due to recent feedback notes based on episode one, the screenwriter stated that I don’t have to always put the name of the character if that character is continuing his or her dialogue after a action.

I haven’t incorporated transition into my script, because I haven’t fully understood where to put them in. Looking at the Kill Bill scripts and made me realise that all I need to do is add CUT TO: to show where the scene changes and cutes to something else or the next scene. I have also learn’t how to better add duel dialogue, when two characters are talking at the same time or over each other. I know now that (V.O) stands for voice over, and if a transition or something else breaks that voice over and it continues after, (V.O; CONT’D) which means voice over continued, is the terminology used  to indicate that continuation of the voice over. (O.S) stand for off screen, and  parentheticals do not need to start in capital letters and end in full stops. The terminology I have learn’t from this Kill Bill script will help me write a better script.

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Article review – Dialogue

“The key to good dialogue is to understand that it’s not conversation, it’s action.” As I’m still working on my version of the 2nd episode of our web-series my main focus is dialogue. An article by states that any dialogue a character has, should be have motive behind it. Let the dialogue be the pathway that leads the character to get what he or she wants, or make it an avenue that will give your character something he or she didn’t want at all, let be more than just mundane words and polite speech.

Read it out loud- dialogue always sounds better in your head. Reading out loud may be embarrassing, but it help in letting you know how well your dialogue flows and whether or not something sounds stupid or not…its better to be embarrassed alone then to be embarrassed on set.

Derek Haas (The Courier, The Double, 3:10 to Yuma, Wanted, 2 Fast 2 Furious): “You should be able to look at some page in the middle of the script and know which character is speaking just by reading a dialogue block.” I need to make sure all the characters do not sound alike on paper. What I need to do is add speech mannerisms such as a character always saying “like” in most of there sentences or another character speaking poetically and in riddles. Little things like that will make the characters a bit more realistic.

I have a lot to take away from this article. Most of the stuff I am taking away from it will be in my final evaluation.

Dialogue is truly valuable  only when it has withstood criticism

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Script Feedback – Project 3


Because we’re not producing a 24 minute video for our first episode, all of our feedback thus far has touched on that. The time we’re trying to make it (5-10 minutes) is a proving to be a challenge in drawing people into the story we’re trying to create. On the other side, we do chose to make this a 24 minute pilot, we don’t have a big enough budget to shoot everything or do we have the time to all that, and edit everything in time for it to get a good mark. What I think should change is that, we need to make the dialogue sharper! develop better speech patterns for each character, add more pots that hook people into the characters lives and add more subtext.

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Spec vs Shooting Script

Spec script (short for speculation script) is a script written with the typical screenwriting format, structure and story characterisation, with the intent to have that script optioned or purchased. A spec script serves as a window to the story of said script, and should have enough detail to to draw the reader into the story. Unlike the shooting script, the spec script doesn’t need and camera angles and any technicalities such as the lighting of the scene and so on.

Shooting scripts. This is written under the guidance and direction of the director of film, after the spec script has been optioned/purchased. In this version of the script is where things like camera angles and lighting are worked into the body of the script. Shooting scripts also often times story the process of storyboarding.

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Note-worthy advice

I have recently received more feedback on the latest version of the first episode script.

Most of the notes and the advice was based the character interactions and the dialogue flow between everybody. I have adjusted the script to some of the advice that I thought we need. Grammar is becoming a problem and I really need to start reading things a few times and spell checking before I send my script and other paperwork to other script writers.

Key adive

  • Dialogue and phases are a little hard to understand
  •  Use better grammar, commas can do wonders
  • Rethink your opening shot
  • Add character descriptions when introducing them, to better identify them
  • Establish character speech patterns